Eensie Weensie Halloween Fun (Contest Alert!)

10/27/2014

Oh, you guys! I am so excited to finally have time to participate in Susanna Leonard Hill's Halloweensie Contest. Why am I doing it? It's fun! You can do it, too. It will raise your writing spirits.

Underlying Topic: Halloween
Words you must use in your entry: Creak, Broomstick, Pumpkin (any form of these words- Example: Creak, creaked, creaks, etc.)
Word Limit: 100 words! That's why it's called HalloWEENSIE!

Official Rules and Prizes are listed HERE. Susanna's the boss on this one, so it's her way or the highway. Ha, ha! Susanna's amazing, folks. You'll need to check out her official rules so you know exactly what to do. And you'll want to see the awesome prizes!

Here's my entry! See you over at Susanna's!

Prankenstein (94 words)

Creeeeeak! Hello? Is someone there?
Why’d I take my brother’s dare?
Wandering out into the night,
Dark and freezing, filled with fright.
I walk further. Not sure why.
Broomsticks swish! I start to cry.
Lights go on. It’s just my mom…
Cleaning up the pumpkin bomb.
What a nasty prank to play!
It’s my brother’s turn to pay.
Now’s my chance. I get in place.
Hidden in the empty space.
Shh! It’s him! He shuffles near.
Just about. He’s almost here!
“BLAH!” I shout, and watch him jump.
“Look who’s laughing now, ya chump!”

74 Comments

Cheryl Secomb link

10/27/2014 05:53:10 pm

HaHa! What a fun poem, Carrie. Very cute. Well done!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 06:09:57 am

Thank, Cheryl! Sometimes I'm so tightly wound that the fun oozes out of my fingertips and into my keyboard. This being no exception. :)

Damon Dean link

10/27/2014 05:57:15 pm

Fun! Love startling unsuspecting spooks.

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 06:08:46 am

Thanks, Damon! It's all about the fun!

Heather Kinser link

10/27/2014 07:05:49 pm

This one's funny--for slightly older kids--and the rhyme works really well. I got a kick out of it. Well done!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 06:08:05 am

Thanks Heather! I'm always rooting for the younger sibling to get the older one back! :) Sometimes they think they are so funny, go too far, and need a taste of their own medicine. :)

cecilia link

10/27/2014 08:58:12 pm

sibling rivalry and pumpkin bombs - very good mix there. :)

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 06:05:47 am

LOL- What could be better? Shucks! Forgot the chocolate!

Deborah Williams link

10/28/2014 01:40:15 am

Perfect rhythm and rhyme and a great story, too! Love this, Carrie!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 06:04:11 am

Wow, Deborah...I've been working hard on my rhythm and rhyme. It's good to hear I'm starting to hit it. Thanks!

Julie Rowan-Zoch link

10/28/2014 02:24:55 am

Ah, sibling love! Great bit of revenge, Carrie. Well done!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 06:02:58 am

Thanks, Julie!

Penny Parker Klostermann link

10/28/2014 02:37:02 am

So cute, Carrie! I love that she made him pay :-) Definitely a true sibling story.

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 06:02:00 am

Sibling rivalry story of my household now that they are older: Pranks and "getting him back." Lovely. Although, I know my first graders thought it was funny to play pranks, too. :)

Kirsti Call link

10/28/2014 04:17:21 am

LOVE this! Great name, great premise and so MUCH fun to read!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 06:00:01 am

Thanks, Kirsti!

Susan Halko

10/28/2014 05:44:54 am

I have never heard "pumpkin bomb" before, and I love it! Fun poem, Carrie!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 05:59:16 am

Ha! Have you SEEN one, though, Susan? Or been part of the clan that took one and smashed it? :) I was never a pumpkin smasher, myself, but always felt sorry for the poor little smashed pumpkins and families who lost their "loved ones." Hmmm...story idea just struck!

Nancy Tandon link

10/28/2014 06:54:55 am

As a little sister myself, I declare your story AWESOME!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 07:01:31 am

Thanks, Nancy! Now go get that bigger sibling! :) It's Halloween week...scare the *beep* out of 'em.

Kathy Halsey

10/28/2014 10:59:57 am

Great rhyme and fun tale.

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 05:02:30 pm

Thanks, Kathy!

Carrie Finison link

10/28/2014 11:20:11 am

Great sibling story - and I love the title! This was a fun read, Carrie!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 05:03:39 pm

Thank you, Carrie. I love your title, (Carrie), too. :)

Elaine Kiely Kearns

10/28/2014 11:26:37 am

Great job, Carrie!! Good luck in the contest!!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 05:04:44 pm

Thanks, Elaine! It's a fun Halloween treat just to participate. :)

Cathy Ballou Mealey link

10/28/2014 01:51:59 pm

Nice Carrie! Glad the younger sib got sweet revenge! Happy Halloweensie!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 05:05:49 pm

Happy Halloweensie to you, too! Thanks for reading and for the compliment, Cathy.

rhythm link

10/28/2014 03:10:24 pm

That's great!!!! Pumpkin bombs! Awesome!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/28/2014 05:06:39 pm

Thanks, Rhythm!

Joanna link

10/29/2014 02:29:06 am

That title is a winner, I know editors would love it!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/29/2014 05:10:46 pm

Thanks, Joanna! I hope you are enjoying all the poems in the contest!

Wendy Greenley

10/29/2014 03:07:49 am

Sounds like two stories for America's Funniest Home Videos! Funny, Carrie.

Carrie Charley Brown

10/29/2014 05:12:00 pm

Thanks, Wendy! I haven't watched that show in so long! I remember laughing myself to tears, though, when I did.

Lauri Meyers link

10/29/2014 05:26:10 am

I have no patience for pumpkin bombs. His chump brother had it coming:)

Carrie Charley Brown

10/29/2014 05:12:51 pm

Yes he did, Lauri! Thanks for reading! :)

Kristi Veitenheimer

10/29/2014 06:44:31 am

Carrie, I love you're poem! I can totally envision the scene!

Kristi Veitenheimer

10/29/2014 06:45:22 am

your poem! LOL

Carrie Charley Brown

10/29/2014 05:13:51 pm

Thanks, Kristi! I knew what you meant. :)

Susanna Leonard Hill link

10/29/2014 06:50:57 am

Hahaha! You made me laugh, Carrie! You have nailed sibling behavior so perfectly :) Great job evoking the Halloween spookiness, and very well-written rhyme! I'm so glad you finally had a chance to join in the Halloweensie fun! :)

Carrie Charley Brown

10/29/2014 05:15:24 pm

Thank you for the compliments. :) Thanks for sponsoring/creating such a fun contest!

rupali link

10/29/2014 07:07:16 am

What fun to scare siblings! ! I just got nostalgic :) scary and fun both at the same time. Thanks for sharing!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/29/2014 05:17:55 pm

And sometimes it's fun to scare my kids, too... but only when they are able to laugh about it! One time I thought I was playing a funny joke and ended up scaring my oldest son to tears. Such a mean mommy! Maybe he'll think twice about scaring his little brother, though?

Johnell link

10/29/2014 08:08:04 am

What a great ending. Every kids dream to get back at a wrong-doing sibling.

Carrie Charley Brown

10/29/2014 05:19:18 pm

And sometimes a parent's dream to see the little guy finally come out on top. :) Thanks for reading, Johnell!

Buffy Silverman link

10/29/2014 08:26:57 am

Love your title, and your ending--a definite kid-pleaser!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/29/2014 05:19:57 pm

Thanks, Buffy!

Patricia Tilton link

10/29/2014 09:45:47 am

Great rhyming! Love the gotcha with the brother.

Carrie Charley Brown

10/29/2014 05:20:43 pm

Thanks, Patricia!

Linda Schueler link

10/29/2014 02:39:23 pm

Great rhyme and good twist at the end.

Carrie Charley Brown

10/29/2014 05:21:21 pm

Thanks, Linda! I appreciate you stopping by!

Marlaina Gray link

10/29/2014 02:47:08 pm

Way funny, and nice rhyming!

Carrie Charley Brown

10/29/2014 05:22:15 pm

You are so sweet, Marlaina! It's nice to see you here! Come back anytime! :)

Janet Smart link

10/30/2014 12:24:00 am

Love it, Carrie. Nice rhyme.

Carrie Charley Brown

10/30/2014 05:04:51 am

Thanks, Janet!

Catherine Johnson link

10/30/2014 04:01:32 am

Chump is awesome. This is great sibling rivalry.

Carrie Charley Brown

10/30/2014 05:10:29 am

Thanks, Catherine! Sibling rivalry has always been one of those things that drives me the craziest as a parent. It's funny the stages it goes through as they get older. My kids started pranking and scaring each other and about a year ago. Of course, the sibling rivalry was HUGE when my brother and I were growing up, too, so it ends up being in a lot of my stories.

Jilanne Hoffmann

10/30/2014 07:19:52 am

Fantastic rhyme! Fantastic subject! And as a little sister, I found the ending tremendously satisfying. Not that I'm carrying any 40-yr-old Halloween grudges around me or anything. :D

Carrie Charley Brown

11/2/2014 10:40:53 am

Thanks so much, Jilanne! Being the older sibling, I'm sure my little brother would have pleasure saying the same. However, since he got me in trouble so much, even when I was NOT victimizing him, I think he got his revenge early. :) After watching my own kids go through this, I do root for the younger one here, too. :)

Christie Allred link

10/30/2014 11:09:10 am

HaHa! ...ya chump! I like it a lot. Good luck. :)

Carrie Charley Brown

11/2/2014 10:41:17 am

Thanks, Christie!

Carol Varsalona link

10/30/2014 11:26:18 am

Pranskters are all over during Halloween. Glad that you had fun with your offering.

Carrie Charley Brown

11/2/2014 10:41:55 am

Thanks, Carol! It's all about having fun and writing what we love, isn't it? :)

Jean link

10/30/2014 02:30:19 pm

Ya had me at "chump". My kids loved this one, and I did too!

Carrie Charley Brown

11/2/2014 10:42:40 am

Wow, it means the world to me when kids love it! And thank you for loving it, too, Jean!

Angela hawkins link

10/30/2014 03:39:53 pm

Great story that's sure to have the kids laughing! :)

Carrie Charley Brown

11/2/2014 10:43:05 am

Thanks, Angela! I hope so!

Tina Cho link

10/30/2014 05:10:21 pm

Very cute!

Carrie Charley Brown

11/2/2014 10:43:47 am

Thanks, Tina!

Sylvia Liu link

10/31/2014 10:23:59 am

Love it! Such a fun poem and great humor.

Carrie Charley Brown

11/2/2014 10:46:12 am

Thank you so much, Sylvia! I've got to get over to finish reading others, including yours! :)

Diane Tulloch link

10/31/2014 04:42:48 pm

Oh I know about sibling rivalry as a kid. Just glad Halloween wasn't really known back when I was a kid, thank goodness... LOL. This is a great story. Had me from the start!

Carrie Charley Brown

11/2/2014 10:47:34 am

Thanks, Diane! Timeless sibling rivalry. Something that pains all who have siblings, and also something that helps us grow. Even the parents!

Donna Sadd link

11/3/2014 02:45:27 am

Great rhyming ditty. Good job, Carrie! :0)

Carrie Charley Brown

As a children’s writer, and a teacher, my goal is to help you carry on. Sometimes learning is challenging, so why go it alone? Your journey will be more meaningful and comfortable with friends to share it with. Together, we'll get up close and personal with authors, illustrators, and the best of picture books. If we work together, great things will follow!