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PreReFoReMo Day 1: Kirsti Call and Carrie Charley Brown Begin Boldly

2/27/2016

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Snip! The ceremonial ribbon flies free to officially open ReFoReMo 2016! Today starts three days of PreReFoReMo... a time to give you a little taste of education and open the research gates! You might not have enough fuel for the month-long journey without a healthy breakfast. Three days ought to give you enough!

First of all, if you have not registered for ReFoReMo yet, you only have a few days left! Bring your friends and register HERE to be eligible for prizes at the conclusion of ReFoReMo. Our reading list and goals can be found HERE and the low-down on the blog and logistics is HERE. But enough about reminders, let's get to the breakfast of champions!

Bold Beginnings
By Kirsti Call and Carrie Charley Brown
 
You’ve always heard that first impressions are everything, right? Well, it’s no different for a story. It’s your job to grab the reader right from the start and make a bold statement in some way. If you don’t, you may be risking a pass on your story.
 
Just to prove how much a beginning can impact you, we’re going to start this post again.
 
Beginning #2:
Today we’re going to share some bold beginnings.     BUZZZZ! Boring!
 
Beginning #3:
Crafting a perfect beginning can be a make or break your chance at getting noticed. Agents are busy! A bad first line can be an early signal that the next part is going to bomb as well.
 
Beginning #4:
When was the last time you wished that a child would put a book down? Never! We want kids to be excited about turning the pages!
 
Beginning #5
How do we hook our readers with the first sentence? The beginning of your story guarantees whether someone will keep reading or put it down. 
 
Essentially, the five beginnings above have the same concept, just different approaches. Some are better than others at hooking the reader. Given the subjectivity involved, we're sure some prefer one, while others prefer another. (But we're guessing not many people would say that #2 is the best!)
 
In order to get you started on the right foot, we’ve selected ten beginnings that will put the wind in your sail! These examples compelled us to keep turning the pages. Here’s to a great beginning!

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Kirsti’s picks:
 
Mustache Baby by Bridget Heos and Joy Ang
“When Baby Billy was born, his family noticed something odd.  He had a mustache.”
A baby with a mustache?  What a concept!  I want to keep reading!
 
The Day the Crayons Came Home by Drew Daywalt and Oliver Jeffers
“One day, Duncan and his crayons were happily coloring together when a strange stack of postcards arrived for him in the mail...”
Oooo... mystery! Who sent the strange stack of postcards? Why? I definitely want to turn the page.
 
Everyone Love Bacon by Kelly Dipuchchio and Eric Wight
“Everybody loves Bacon.  Including Bacon.”
Interesting...Bacon is a character! And he loves himself.  I want to keep reading.
 
Seaver the Weaver by Paul Czajack and The Brothers Hilts:  
“In the light of the moon Seaver emerged from his egg.”
Lovely, lyrical and magical!  I want to read to find out what happens to Seaver.
 
Wolfie the Bunny by Ame Dyckman and Zachariah Ohora:
“The Bunny family came home to find a bundle outside their door.”  
Intrigue!  What is the bundle outside the Bunny family’s door?

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Carrie’s picks:
 
One Word From Sophia by Jim Averbeck and Yasmeen Ismail
“Sophia’s birthday was coming up, and she had five things on her mind—One True Desire and four problems.”
Immediately, I want to know what her “One True Desire” (a proper noun) and four problems are!
 
Bridget’s Beret by Tom Lichtenheld
“Bridget was drawn to drawing. She liked to draw as much as other kids liked ice cream.”
I love the play on words and kids will be like: ”As much as ice cream?! Woah! 
 
A Dance Like Starlight: One Ballerina’s Dream by Kristy Dempsey and Floyd Cooper
“Stars hardly shine in the New York City sky, with the factories spilling out smoke and street lights spreading bright halos round their pin-top faces. It makes it hard to find a star, even harder to make a wish, the one wish that if I could just breathe it out loud to the first star of night, I might be able to believe it true.”
Doesn’t that make you want to know what her wish is?! This main character has captured my heart and the lyrical language is to die for!
 
The Monstore by Tara Lazar and James Burks
“At the back of Frankensweet’s Candy Shoppe, under the last box of sour gumballs, there’s a trap door. Knock five times fast, hand over a bag of squirmy worms, and you can crawl inside… THE MONSTORE.”
I have to go there! I want to knock and bargain with the monster at the trapdoor. I must see the inside of this magical sounding place. This world has captured me. And…it starts with candy. Kids love candy!
 
Henry’s Freedom Box by Ellen Levine and Kadir Nelson
“Henry Brown wasn’t sure how old he was. Henry was a slave. And slaves weren’t allowed to know their birthdays.”
Henry has my heart right away. When you think about young children, most of them are taught to show their age on their fingers from the time they are one. And here is a child who is not sure how old he is. I must read on to make sure he is taken care of and finds a way to a better life.
 
When assessing a beginning, ask yourself:
Does the first sentence interest you in a way that you have never encountered?
Does it leave you feeling like you need to read further to find out what happens next?
 
If you answered yes, then you might be onto something! So, are you ready? Go get those bold beginnings!
 
Share a beginning that grabs you in the comments below.

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Kirsti Call reads, critiques and revises every day.  She is a member of various critique groups, and blogs for Writer's Rumpus, Children's Book Academy, and the Institute of Children's Literature.  As the published author of The Raindrop Who Couldn't Fall and a homeschool mom, Kirsti coaches revision for children ages 5-18.  Her school visits involve interactive writing, singing, and of course, reading for research! Kirsti contributed as a 2015 CYBILS YA Fiction panelist and is proud to be the 2016 ReFoReMo co-coordinator. You can follow her journey at www.kirsticall.com.
Carrie Charley Brown is the founder and co-coordinator of ReFoReMo, the Reading for Research Month blog & challenge. She eats, sleeps, and breathes picture books as a writer, professional critique mentor, and contributor on various blogs such as Writer's Rumpus and the Institute of Children's Literature. Carrie contributed as a 2014/2015 CYBILS fiction picture book panelist and donates a large part of her time to SCBWI North Texas as the Regional Advisor. She also produces kidlit videos and provides marketing services for authors and kidlit organizations. She has taught pre-k, kindergarten, first, and third grades. You can follow her writing journey right here on this site.
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202 Comments
Katelyn Aronson
2/27/2016 03:54:56 am

I have a hunch that "Seaver the Weaver" was borrowing from one of the most magical lines ever read to me as a child: "In the light of the moon a little egg lay on a leaf..." (Eric Carle's The Very Hungry Caterpillar). So simple, and yet even today, when I read that first line to children, it seems to hold them spellbound.

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:39:09 pm

Both are amazing books! :)

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Andrea link
2/27/2016 06:21:09 am

After peeking at the beginnings of about twelve picture books in a stack in my office, I was most drawn to this beginning from LENNY & LUCY by Phillip C. Stead & Erin E.Stead:

"Winding along a bumpy road, through the dark unfriendly woods, Peter said, "I think this is a terrible idea."

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:40:06 pm

A great page turn! Thanks for adding to the list!

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Tina Cho link
2/27/2016 06:40:00 am

From The Adventures of Beekle: The Unimaginary Friend

"He was born on an island far away where imaginary friends were created. Here, they lived and played, each eagerly waiting to be imagined by a real child."

I love the premise, and it makes me want to know who it is, so turn the page!

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Maria Marshall
2/28/2016 01:40:30 pm

Tina. one of my all time favorite books!

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:40:59 pm

I love that....waiting to be imagined! :)

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Kirsti Call
3/4/2016 06:03:43 am

This is my five year old Sammy's absolute favorite book! He has a copy signed to him by Dan!

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Linda Schueler link
2/27/2016 07:30:27 am

"Art class was over, but Vashti sat glued to her chair. Her paper was empty."
the dot by Peter H. Reynolds

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:41:48 pm

I love when words play! Glued to her chair in art! Brilliant!

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Stephanie Gray
2/27/2016 07:35:49 am

"Press here and turn the page."

From PRESS HERE by Hervé Tullet

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Kirsti Call
3/4/2016 06:04:24 am

I adore this book!

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Jodi Mckay
2/27/2016 07:45:21 am

"Once upon a time in Spain, there was a little bull and his name was Ferdinand."- Munro Leaf. I just love a good name and to name a bull Ferdinand just drew me right in.

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Traci Bold link
2/29/2016 11:22:47 am

Ferdinand the Bull is another great PB with a good first start from the early years.

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:42:43 pm

Names are enticing, for sure!

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Manju Howard
2/27/2016 07:53:34 am

From The Race by Edouard Manceau

"It begins with a guy, a can of paint, and a paintbrush."

A fun, quick read.

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Cathy Breisacher
2/27/2016 08:01:58 am

Mustache! by Mac Barnett

"Duncan was a terrible king, but he was terribly handsome."

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:43:28 pm

Funny book!

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Linda Carpenter link
2/27/2016 08:06:07 am

What a fun way to start the ReFoReMo 2016!
The list is awesome.

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Kelly Rice Schmitt
2/27/2016 08:31:38 am

Jack Frost,The Guardian of Childhood By William Joyce

"Of course you know the guardians of childhood. You've known them since before you can remember, and you'll know them till your memories are like twilight."

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L. Michelle Quraishi link
3/1/2016 04:48:35 pm

Ohh, these lines just resonate with me! "Cuddle up! You're in for a story..."

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Lisa Williams
3/5/2016 11:40:55 am

My fave William Joyce is The Fantastic Flying Books of Mr. Morris Lessmore. My students have asked for that one every year since I first introduced it to them. They love it.

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Juli Caveny link
2/27/2016 08:48:11 am

"The fox felt the car slow before the boy did, as he felt everything first." ~Pax by Sara Penypacker (Not a PB, but an MG)

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Susan Wroble link
2/27/2016 08:54:17 am

"She could have picked a chiming clock or a porcelain figurine, but Miss Bridie chose a shovel back in 1856," -- the first line of Leslie Connor's Miss Bridie Chose a Shovel.

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Melanie Ellsworth
2/28/2016 03:11:56 pm

Oh - I love this first line, too! This is one of my daughter's and my favorite books.

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Sydney O'Neill
2/27/2016 09:18:56 am

The Gruffalo by Julia Donaldson.

A mouse took a stroll through the deep dark wood. A fox saw the mouse and the mouse looked good.

Who could stop reading? Instant tension.

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:44:59 pm

The rhythm of the language pulls me in there. :)

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Maria Gianferrari link
2/27/2016 09:22:25 am

Great choices! I'm not yet awake enough to add to these, but beginnings are so crucial :)

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Kim Piddington link
2/27/2016 09:26:06 am

Old Turtle by Douglas Wood
Once, long long ago...yet somehow, not so very long...when all the animals and rocks and winds and waters and trees and birds and fish and all the beings of the world could speak...and understand one another...there began...An Argument.

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:45:48 pm

Great world building!

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Jennette Mutolo
2/27/2016 09:45:00 am

Definitely rethinking some of my opening lines!
And for anyone who does read alouds to classes..."Everyone loves Bacon" works well with all ages. Really ALL! After the read aloud, I ask, by show of hands, if anyone knows someone like Bacon. How does someone like Bacon make you feel? Bacon has a whole other meaning at my school. I'm hearing kids say, "You're being kind of bacony." and "Don't be like bacon." etc. Send a great message in a really fun way :-)

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Kirsti Call
3/4/2016 06:06:46 am

What a fun way to learn from a great book!

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Juliana Lee link
2/27/2016 09:47:32 am

There are so many new books out with wonderful beginnings. Salina Yoon's BE A FRIEND is one of them, but sadly I don't have it with me. But I do have another lesser known title published earlier this month, MY DOG'S A CHICKEN by Susan McElroy Montanari has the distinct 'poor folks' dialect and simple humor. Read this first line and tell me you don't want to read more... Lula Mae wanted a puppy, but Mama said, "Dog's just another mouth to feed. These are hard times, Lula Mae. You've got to make do."

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Kirsti Call
3/4/2016 06:07:46 am

I knew I had to read MY DOG's A CHICKEN the moment I saw the title. It is a great one!

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Lori Dubbin
2/27/2016 09:54:21 am

I love the action in the first line of your post: "Snip! The ceremonial ribbon flies free to officially open ReFoReMo 2016!"
And I love the first line in the nonfiction picture book: STAR STUFF, Carl Sagan and the Mysteries of the Cosmos by Stephanie Roth Sisson:
In the Milky Way galaxy...In a neighborhood of stars...On the third planet from our sun...In a big city...In a small apartment...Lived a boy named Carl. (the reader soars over more than one page to read this, but it's one continuous "who, what, where" that leaves the reader wanting to know "why?")

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:47:22 pm

Cool pattern and build!

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Jarm Del Boccio link
2/27/2016 09:58:32 am

"Noah Webster always knew he was right, and he never got tired of saying so (even if he wasn't). He was, he said, "full of CON-FI-DENCE" [noun: belief that one is right] from the very beginning."

- "Noah Webster & His Words" by Jeri Chase Ferris

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Melissa Stoller link
2/27/2016 10:03:03 am

Clever way to start this project! I love the first line:
"This hat is not mine. I just stole it." The line is from THIS IS NOT MY HAT by Jon Klassen. I will definitely turn the page to find out whose hat it is, why was it stolen, and what will happen when the rightful owner discovers its absence? Looking forward to the next post!

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Leah Heilman Schanke
2/29/2016 07:35:26 am

I was thinking of the same book! Every line makes you want to keep reading.

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Charlotte Dixon
2/27/2016 10:12:49 am

Great way to start ReFoReMo-Beginnings! One of my favs is the first line in TUPELO RIDES THE RAILS: Tupelo had been dumped by the side of the road, her sock toy, Mr. Bones, tossed out after her. She was confused-she had done nothing wrong. Now where would they go? My heart breaks each time I read this beginning. I want to save Tupelo.

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:48:56 pm

Creating a character to root for from the beginning is so important! Thanks, Charlotte! :)

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Sue Poduska
2/27/2016 10:14:13 am

Wonderful start to a wonderful month.

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Anita Banks
2/27/2016 10:24:01 am

Woohoo. Here we go. I am excited to get started.

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Therese Nagi
2/27/2016 10:46:04 am

I liked the picture book "Daredevil" The Daring Life of Betty Skelton. The first line grabbed my attention. While most girls played with their dolls, Betty Skelton played with her metal plane.
I wanted to know more about the character.

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Cassie Bentley
2/27/2016 10:51:17 am

My favorite first line is "Where's Papa going with the ax? From Charlotte's Web. I'll add a section to my ReFoReMo notebook to list great hooks. Great start to March 2016

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Susan Deo
2/27/2016 10:52:36 am

I don't have any of my favorites right in front of me to quote, but what I'm remembering is the opening lines of the classic Madeline by Ludwig Bemelman. I think it still holds merit today!
"In an old house in Paris that was covered with vines
Lived twelve little girls in two straight lines
In two straight lines they broke their bread
And brushed their teeth and went to bed.
They left the house at half past nine
In two straight lines in rain or shine-
The smallest one was Madeline."
Between the strong image of setting, the rhythm of the poetry, the hint of their days, and "The smallest one was Madeline." I'm hooked! I want to know more...

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Angela Turner
2/27/2016 10:54:08 am

The first line of Tea Party Rules by Amy Dyckman:

Cub was playing in the woods when he smelled something delicious.

It not only drew me in to see what he found, it made me hungry!

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Diane Fight
2/27/2016 10:54:51 am

One of my favorites openings is from Friday Night at Hodges Cafe by Tim Egan: Hodge's Cafe was busy as usual last Friday night. Everyone was savoring the delicious desserts that the cafe is famous for. Hodges is considered by many to be the finest pastry chef in the city. Too bad his duck is so crazy. (Can't you just hear a dramatic chord here)

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Lisa Connors link
2/27/2016 11:08:44 am

ReFoReMo is finally here! Thanks for the great (hook) beginning. I will be rereading all my manuscripts soon to see if they have what it takes to hook a reader. Thanks!

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Cindy Jolley
2/27/2016 11:15:40 am

First I looked at my own manuscripts to consider my beginnings...
I have some revising to do.
From The Incredible Book Eating Boy by Oliver Jeffers
"Henry loved books. But not like you and I love books, no. Not quite..."

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Bethany Roberts link
2/27/2016 11:22:56 am

"On an island of music
in a city of drumbeats
the drum dream girl
dreamed"
from Drum Dream Girl by Margarita Engle
Lyrical with an unusual setting. What does she dream?

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Joanne Sher link
2/27/2016 11:40:24 am

Fabulous start! And here's one of MY favorites:
"1+1=3?"
from 1+1=5 and Other Unlikely Additions by David LaRochelle/Brenda Sexton.
Who does NOT want to know how THAT is the right answer??

Excited for ReFoReMo!

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Susan Cabael
2/27/2016 11:45:03 am

"Bobby had a big problem at school.
Her name was Ms. Kirby."

Peter Brown's MY TEACHER IS A MONSTER

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Nancy Ramsey
2/27/2016 11:47:18 am

I really like the way Tammi Sauer begins YOUR ALIEN: You will be looking out your window when something wonderful comes your way.
You have to keep reading! Thanks Kirsti and Carrie for a great post- Looking forward to the month ahead!

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Natasha Wing link
2/27/2016 11:55:53 am

Officer Buckle and Gloria by Peggy Rathman. "Officer Buckle knew more safety tips than anyone else in Napville.

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Kirsti Call
3/4/2016 06:09:37 am

I adore this book, Natasha! Great beginning!

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Sandy Powell
2/27/2016 11:58:27 am

"This is Olivia. She is good at lots of things."
From "Olivia" by Ian Falconer

I love Olivia. She is a great character.

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Sue Heavenrich link
2/27/2016 12:01:10 pm

"Farmer Brown has a problem. His cows like to type." From Click Clack Moo.
What? Cows that type? I've got to know what they're writing!

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Laurie Bouck
2/27/2016 06:25:05 pm

Sue Heavenrich, this is one of my favourite books!! My girls had it when they were young and i enjoyed it as much as they did! lol

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:51:43 pm

Absolutely! The concept is golden!

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Kate Harold link
2/27/2016 12:04:11 pm

From When Blue Met Egg, by Lindsay Ward:

"One snowy morning, Blue was awakened by something extraordinary flying through the air…

…a rather strange egg."

What was strange about this egg?!

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Gabrielle Snyder link
2/27/2016 12:22:14 pm

"When Mama first goes away, what I miss most is the sound of her voice."

MAMA'S NIGHTINGALE by Edwidge Danticat

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Michele Manning
2/27/2016 12:23:45 pm

"There is a woman on our street they call the Myth." from Emily by Michael Bedard.

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Vivian Kirkfield link
2/27/2016 12:27:26 pm

So many favorites...it's hard to pick just one. I love the simplicity of 'My Grandfather's Coat' by Jim Aylesworth.
"My grandfather came to America when he was very young. He came alone and with little more than nothing at all."
Right away, I am pulled in because he is very young, taking this immense journey by himself. And what does he bring with him? Little more than nothing at all...oh my...only six words...but they convey what he has left behind - everything that he loved.

Thank you so much, Carrie and Kirstine...already, with this one post, you've helped me with the story I am working on. ;)

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:53:35 pm

Yes, Vivian! A strong emotional pull sure makes you root for the character. I love that book, too. :)

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JEN link
2/27/2016 12:28:20 pm

"This is the book with no pictures."

This post is a great beginning of ReFoReMo about beginnings.

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Denise Engle
2/27/2016 12:30:53 pm

Fabulous text choices. I savored each one, like a tropical fruit salad! Thanks for opening ReFoReMo with this treat!

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Bev Baird link
2/27/2016 12:55:16 pm

It was so interesting to look back at the beginnings of some of the books I love. One tho stood out - for it's image and poetry.
"Imagine a Night" by Sarah L. Thomson, paintings by Rob Gonsalves (the artwork is stunning by the way)
"imagine a night...
...when snow white sheets
grow crisp and cold,
and someone whispers,
"Follow me." "
I want to follow and see where I am lead.

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debbie mccue
2/27/2016 03:56:35 pm

Oh, yes. That beginning hooked me. I can't wait to read that book, Bev. Thanks.

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Lisa Williams
2/27/2016 08:03:09 pm

I need to read this one!! As a school librarian it is nice to have all these beginnings. It helps me focus in on books I want for the school library that I don't have yet. (Not to mention helping me with my writing.)

Lisa

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:54:57 pm

Woah...the mystery! And setting and sensory experience pulls me in! Thanks for sharing this, Bev!

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saputnam
2/27/2016 12:58:06 pm

What a terrific way to begin ReFoReMo! I like the older stories and mine comes from the book, Twilight and Fireside: Tales for Children by Elizabeth Clark, University Of London, 1942

The Donkey Who Helped Father Christmas AKA The Little Lame Donkey

“It was a cold night. There was a full moon and it lit up the snow-covered meadow where the little lame donkey stood alone.”

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Rachel Hamby link
2/27/2016 01:07:08 pm

A fun way to start! I love reading through all these opening lines. Some are new to me and now I have to add more books to my library list. :)

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Sussu link
2/27/2016 01:24:51 pm

I love to hear about the creative process. This will show you the different drafts E.B. White’s wrote for CHARLOTTE'S WEB:

FIRST DRAFT:
A barn can have a horse in it and a barn can have a cow in it, and a barn can have a hen scratching in the chaff and swallow flyin’ in and out through the door—but if a barn hasn’t got a pig in it, it is hardly worth talk about.

SECOND DRAFT:
Charlotte was a big, gray spider who lived in the doorway of a barn. She was about the size of a gumdrop and she had eight legs and plenty of tricks up her sleeves.

FINAL DRAFT (AS IT APPEARS IN THE BOOK):
“Where’s Papa going with that ax?” said Fern to her mother as they were setting the table for breakfast.

From: How Do You Teach Writing by Barry Lane, pp. 144-145

Big changes, huh?

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Sussu
2/27/2016 01:28:31 pm

SOURCE: http://robsanderswrites.blogspot.com/2011/02/great-beginnings.html

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:56:10 pm

Thank you for listing the source! :)

KV
2/28/2016 04:58:49 am

Wow - this is great! Thank you for sharing this.

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Sharon Constantino
2/27/2016 01:26:42 pm

What a fun start to ReFoReMo! I guess I'm still in Valentines Day mode. I chose Roses Are Pink, Your Feet Really Stink by Diane dr Grout.
"There they were, fifteen blank valentine cards waiting to be filled with valentines poems."

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DeLeon
2/27/2016 01:29:27 pm

Starting Strong! Great examples! From now on, I'll make sure to have amazing bold beginnings. Thank you, Carrie and Kristi.

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Julie Burchstead
2/27/2016 01:35:59 pm

"See this man?
This one sitting here on the porch?
That's Mr. George Baker,
and he's a hundred years old,
no kidding."
Mr. George Baker by Amy Hest.

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Cathy
2/27/2016 08:34:31 pm

I how I love that book!

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Carrie Charley Brown
3/1/2016 11:58:35 pm

Amy Hest is sooooooo good! I love When Jessie Came Across the Sea....tear jerker! So good! And the Dog the Belonged to No One. Now I will have to read the one you listed! Thanks, Julie!

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Christine Rodenbour
2/27/2016 02:02:33 pm

I Want My Hat Back by Jon Klassen

"My hat is gone. I want it back."
How can two simple sentences like this create so many unanswered questions? Must...know...answers!

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Lynn Alpert link
2/27/2016 02:04:21 pm

"Everyone was perfectly fine
with the way things were.
Everyone but Mr. Tiger."
MR. TIGER GOES WILD by Peter Brown

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Alice Fulgione
2/27/2016 02:22:49 pm

The first page of, IF YOU WANT TO SEE A WHALE, read, "If you want to see a whale you will need a window." I immediately wanted to read on to find out exactly what the boy saw through the window and if he finally did see a whale.

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Helen Dening link
2/27/2016 02:59:29 pm

Thanks for the nourishing breakfast. It's better than oatmeal.

The Super Hungry Dinosaur by Martin Waddell
Hal and his little dog, Billy were playing in Hal's backyard, when ... Grrrrrrr!

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Rita Lorraine Hubbard link
2/27/2016 03:06:17 pm

A very old woman stands at the bottom of a very steep hill. It's Voting Day, she's an American, and by God, she is going to vote. Lillian is her name.
LILLIAN'S RIGHT TO VOTE by Jonah Winter

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Rosie Taylor
2/27/2016 03:42:16 pm

Some of the kids in Marilyn's class had monsters. It was the latest thing. from Marilyn's Monster by Michelle Knudsen

A matter-of-fact telling sentence for something quite extraordinary!

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debbie mccue
2/27/2016 03:45:06 pm

By now I think you know what happened to your sandwich. But you may not know how it happened.

So let me tell you.

It all started with the bear.

From: THE BEAR ATE YOUR SANDWICH by Julia Sarcone-Roach

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Melanie Ellsworth
2/28/2016 03:19:28 pm

I'm glad you wrote this, Debbie, because I was thinking of this book as I read the post but I didn't have the book at home. Love this story!

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Colleen Paeff link
2/27/2016 03:46:41 pm

"One bright fall day, Sophie chose a squash at the farmer’s market.
Her parents planned to serve it for supper, but Sophie had other ideas." From Sophie's Squash by Pat Zietlow Miller

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Kirsti Call
3/4/2016 06:12:29 am

This is one of my favorites!

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Sara Gentry
2/27/2016 03:55:04 pm

I was also going to say Click, Clack, Moo!
Fun reading the other comments.

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Lisa Venditelli Karmel
2/27/2016 04:28:59 pm

Everyone was perfectly fine with the way things were. Everyone but Mr. Tiger.

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Wendy Greenley
2/27/2016 04:39:40 pm

Welcome to the river of grass, running green from side to side, a river that is inches deep and miles wide.
From Jane Yolen's Welcome to the River of Grass:

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Maria Johnson
2/28/2016 11:39:37 am

Jane Yolen is so amazing and this is one I didn't know. Thanks.

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Julia Wasson
2/27/2016 05:23:35 pm

Iridescence of Birds, Maclachlan:
If you were a boy named Henri Matisse who lived in a dreary town in northern France where the skies were gray and the days were cold adn you wanted color and light and sun, and your mother, to brighten your days, painted plates to hang on the walls with pictures of meadows and trees, rivers and birds, and she let you mix the colors of paint - yellow and red, red and blue, blue and yellow - and let you arrange the fruit and flowers she brought from the market - pears and oranges in a bowl on a tablecloth, and flowers in a blue vase - and in the town people wove silks with colors all tangled, one color next to the other next to the other, and your mother put red rugs on the walls of the house and on the dirt parlor floor so all the world looked red, and you raised pigeons, watching their sharp eyes and red feet, and their colors that changed with the light as they moved that your mother called iridescence, would it be a surprise that you grew up to be a fine painter who painted red rooms and flowers that danced on green stems and fruit in a bowl on a blue and white tablecloth?

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Maria Johnson
2/28/2016 11:40:23 am

One of my most favorite books too.

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Valarie Giogas
2/27/2016 05:41:10 pm

Love all the great examples. Can't wait to go back to my beginnings and test them out.

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Donna Cangelosi link
2/27/2016 06:00:00 pm

What a fun way to start ReFoReMo! And what a great list of opening lines. I love the beginning of Stick and Stone by Beth Ferry: "Stick. Stone. Lonely. Alone."

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Laurie Bouck
2/27/2016 06:26:46 pm

A great start to ReFoReMo! Thank you!! :)

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Diane Asyre
2/27/2016 06:52:38 pm

This is one of my favorites for packing in a lot of tempting information: "One hundred years ago in Paris, when theaters and music halls drew traveling players from all over the world, the best place to stay was at the widow Gâteau's, a boardinghouse on English Street." From "Mirette on the High Wire" by Emily McCully.

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Mona
2/27/2016 06:57:10 pm

Lillian's Right to Vote has already been mentioned, but an image is created without seeing the illustration.
I'm going to go first lining amongst my WIPs! Thank.

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Annette Pimentel link
2/27/2016 07:24:51 pm

"Think you know pink? Think again..."
Pink Is for Blobfish, by Jess Keating

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Elizabeth Duncan
2/27/2016 07:37:39 pm

From "Amos and Boris" by William Steig:

Amos, a mouse, lived by the ocean. He loved the ocean. He loved the smell of sea air. He loved to hear the surf sound-- the bursting breakers, the backwashes with rolling pebbles. He thought a lot about the ocean and he wondered about the faraway places on the other side of the water.

Lyrical language and strong sense of place.

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Linda
2/27/2016 07:57:46 pm

Glamourpuss by: Sarah Weeks

"Once upon a pillow sat a glamorous cat named Glamourpuss."

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Lisa Williams
2/27/2016 07:58:58 pm

I'm still waiting on the library to open so I can gather up the books on the list. (I just found this group/challenge this afternoon.) So, I gathered about 20 picture books from my own shelves and read the beginnings. The beginning I liked most that wasn't from a book already on our to-read list was from Drew Daywalt's book The Day the Crayons Quit: "One day in class, Duncan went to take out his crayons and found a stack of letters with his name on them."

I NEEDED to know what was in those letters. The thing I really enjoyed about this exercise was that I was able to see right away what a huge difference it made to have a great opening. I was able to see what made an opening great vs. mediocre vs. blah. Thanks for a great beginning to the challenge!

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Natalie Rompella link
2/27/2016 08:23:38 pm

From Everything I Know about Monsters by Tom Lichtenheld...
I'm no monsterologist, but I do know enough about monsters to draw some pictures. And I can make up more stuff, so I can draw more pictures. Love it!

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lilli
2/27/2016 08:24:04 pm

Great way to begin: great beginnings!
Thanks also to all the comments adding to the list of greatness!

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Cathy Ballou Mealey link
2/27/2016 08:33:12 pm

I love the opening of "The Tree Lady: The True Story of How One Tree-Loving Woman Changed a City Forever" by H. Joseph Hopkins. Honestly, the full extended title almost counts as the opening line!
“Katherine Olivia Sessions grew up in the woods of Northern California. She gathered leaves from oaks and elms. She collected needles from pines and redwoods. And she braided them together with flowers to make necklaces and bracelets.”

I see the setting and I love this girl's sense of nature and play in the outdoors.

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Maria Johnson
2/28/2016 11:44:38 am

The cover art was enough for me, even before the words,
to want to know everything contained within this book, but
the words are awesome too.

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Noelle McBride
2/27/2016 09:01:56 pm

Wherever You Go by Pat Zietlow Miller:

When it's time for a journey, to learn and to grow,
roads guide your footsteps wherever you go.
Roads give you chances to seek and explore.
Want an adventure? (turn page!)

Just open your door.

I'm ready for this new ReFoReMo adventure!

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Heidi Yates
2/27/2016 09:02:00 pm

"I was hatched to fly," said Penguin. "When do classes start?"
Flight School by Lita Judge

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Maria Marshall
2/28/2016 01:52:41 pm

YES! excellent, intriguing beginning. Such a fun book.

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Karen Konnerth link
2/27/2016 09:20:56 pm

Everyone was perfectly fine with the way things were. Everyone but Mr. Tiger.
Mr. Tiger Goes Wild by Peter Brown

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Cindy Cornwall link
2/27/2016 09:40:39 pm

I just discovered a book by Florence Parry Heide with Edward Gorey illustrations: "The Shrinking of Treehorn". It starts, "Something very strange was happening to Treehorn." What's happening and why the name? Very intriguing.

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Sandy Perlic
2/27/2016 09:42:17 pm

From the first page of I Need My Monster:
"Tonight, when I looked under the bed for my monster, I found this note instead.
'Gone fishing. Back in a week. Gabe'
What was I going to do? I needed a monster under my bed. How was I supposed to get to sleep if my monster was gone?"
I think the fact that this attitude is very unexpected makes you want to turn the page and find out why he needs a monster, and also what he's going to do about his missing monster/getting to sleep.

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Lisa Morgan
2/27/2016 10:28:23 pm

YOUNG IGGY PECK IS AN ARCHITECT and has been since he was two, when he built a great tower-in only an hour- with nothing but diapers and glue. From Iggy Peck Architect, By Andrea Beaty. I have to say, it got me and anything about underwear or diapers will hook the 7 and under set as well!

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Brenda Huante
2/27/2016 10:49:50 pm

I love first sentences! Thank you for the post

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Marcie Wessels link
2/27/2016 11:14:36 pm

From Bernice Gets Carried Away by Hannah Harrison:

It was a horrible, dreary day, and it suited Bernice’s mood just fine.

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Rosemary Basham
2/27/2016 11:42:52 pm

Mr. Willowby's Christmas tree
Came by special delivery.
Full and fresh and glistening green--
The biggest tree he had ever seen!

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Kristi Veitenheimer link
2/28/2016 12:31:31 am

Wow, what an amazing list of great beginnings! Here's another to add to the growing list: I'm my own dog. Nobody owns me. I own myself.
(I'm My Own Dog by David Ezra Stein)

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Ashley Bankhead
2/28/2016 12:45:58 am

I love the beginning of When a Dragon Moves In by Jodi Moore.

"If you build a perfect sand castle, a dragon will move in."

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Deborah Allmand
2/28/2016 01:53:21 am

I'm visiting my Dad so no books but I loved the beginning of CHARLOTTE'S WEB, SOPHIE'S SQUASH, and WHEN A DRAGON MOVES IN.
A great way to begin! Looking forward to the month.

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Karla Valenti
2/28/2016 05:00:29 am

Easily one of my favorite first lines: "The night Max wore his wolf suit and made mischief of one kind and another..."

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Laura Purdie Salas link
2/28/2016 07:52:56 am

Here's one off my reading pile:>) I have always wanted to see a moose--and even if that wasn't a wish--if this were about a different animal--the fun description and meter draw me right in anyway! From LOOKING FOR A MOOSE (Phyllis Root)

"Have you ever seen a moose--
a long-leggy moose--
a branchy-antler,
dinner-diving,
bulgy-nose
moose?"

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Kirsti Call
3/4/2016 06:21:32 am

I love the rhythm of these words. I'll have to read the book!

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Marianne Kuzujanakis link
2/28/2016 08:27:32 am

Can't believe it's already been a year since ReFoReMo 2015!

So glad to begin this exciting 150+ PB month again!

Favorite first line in PB? Way too difficult to choose. Choosing from one of my older favorites (William Steig) who many would sadly say was too wordy for today's tastes, I'd say the opening from GORKY RISES:

"As soon as his parents kissed him goodbye and left, Gorky set up his laboratory by the kitchen sink and got to work."

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Kirsti Call
3/4/2016 06:20:25 am

Ooooh! This looks like a great one!

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Maureen Morrison
2/28/2016 08:45:40 am

What a great way to begin.Time to revisit my own opening lines.

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Katie Parnell
2/28/2016 09:05:56 am

I Want My Hat Back by John Klassen

My hat is gone. I want it back.

It is simple but intriguing. Where is his hat? Did someone steal it? Will he find it? Is it a special hat?

I am looking forward to a great month of research!

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PatHaap
2/28/2016 09:11:59 am

How fun to start off with this! So many books with so many great beginning! One of my favorites is Jon Klassen's "I Want My Hat Back," which begins with "My hat is gone. I want it back." Such simple lines that draw the reader in.

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Midge Smith
2/28/2016 09:45:08 am

"It was late one winter night, long past my bedtime, when Pa and I went owling." from Owl Moon, by Jane Yolen. This just draws me in--

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Celeste Gerard
2/28/2016 10:33:52 am

I love the opening line of Olivia - "This is Olivia. She is good at lots of things." The picture shows her holding a book titled 40 Very Loud Songs.....

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Sam Altmann
2/28/2016 10:41:32 am

I have to go with Where the Wild Things Are -

The night Max wore his wolf suit and made mischief of one kind and another, his mother called him "Wild Thing"...

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Charlene Steadman
2/29/2016 09:33:51 pm

Definitely a great one!

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Annelouise Mahoney link
2/28/2016 11:04:05 am

Thank you so much Carrie for this adventure! I love reading all these first lines so much!!

From This Moose Belongs To Me by Oliver Jeffers:

"Wilfred owned a moose."

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Karen Brady link
2/28/2016 11:04:15 am

"One day in January was a day like any other until..."

The Man with the Violin by Kathy Stinson, Illustrated by Dusan Petricic.

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Jill Tadros
2/28/2016 11:32:46 am

"It all began with a peanut butter and jelly sandwich and it ended with a hummus sandwich."

The Sandwich Swap by Queen Rania with Kelly DiPucchio
Illustrated by Tricia Tusa

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Maria Johnson
2/28/2016 11:49:08 am

Wonderful wonderful beginning. Great examples from everyone.
THERE's A Nightmare in my Closet by Mercer Mayer (1968)
"There used to be a nightmare in my closet."
Just using that past tense is enough to get me to turn the page.

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Amy Murrell
2/28/2016 12:17:11 pm

So many of my favorites are already here but I also love, "For Beatrice Bottomwell, Friday began like any other day. " It's from The Girl Who Never Made Mistakes by Pett and Rubinstein. Published by Source books in 2011.

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Val McCammon
2/28/2016 01:32:28 pm

A boy was collecting pinecones in his wagon when he met a robot.
From Boy + Bot, by Ame Dyckman (2012).

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Maria Marshall
2/28/2016 01:51:37 pm

Two of my favorite openings - not yet mentioned:
"The trouble with having a tiny elephant for a pet is that you never quite fit in." ~ STRICTLY NO ELEPHANTS, Lisa Mantchev
An elephant for a pet? Such a fun idea, I had to know more.

"In the center of Snoozeville, dwells the wee one, the sleepiest sloth, Snuggleford Cuddlebun." ~ SNOOZEFEST, Samantha Berger
I love sloths and the rhyme and fun words just beg you to go on.

Thanks for a great way to start ReFoReMo - at the beginning! :-)

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Melanie Ellsworth
2/28/2016 03:32:10 pm

From FLOP TO THE TOP by Eleanor Davis & Drew Weing

"My name is Wanda. I'm a superstar. Everybody says so."

I love the main character's confidence, and this beginning sets us up to wonder if something might perhaps be coming to knock her off her pedestal!

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Margaret Greanias
2/28/2016 05:41:18 pm

From WAITING by Kevin Henkes:

"There were five of them. And they were waiting..."

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Patricia Nozell
2/28/2016 08:11:39 pm

Such a wonderful post & amazing comments! Like several folks have mentioned, I checked a recent WIP that was sitting next to the computer. And then thought about the book that has been haunting me, "Two White Rabbits," Jairo Buitrago/Rafael Yockteng (2015):

"When we travel, I count what I see. Five cows, four hens and one chucho, as my dad calls them."

I immediately wanted to know where the narrator & Dad were traveling, why the switch in language, and why they were traveling.

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Darlene Frybarger
2/28/2016 09:03:09 pm

I'm separated from my books until Tuesday, but all these beginnings are so much fun to read!

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Terri DeGezelle link
2/28/2016 09:06:34 pm

One day, Little Sal went with her mother to Blueberry Hill to pick blueberries. From Blueberries for Sal by Robert McCloskey still one of my favorites.

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Kimberly Marcus link
2/28/2016 11:16:51 pm

I love the book Roxaboxen by Alice McLerran/Barbara Cooney.
The first two lines are:
Marion called it Roxaboxen. (She always knew the name of everything.)

It grabs me because I want to know what Roxaboxen is and how Marion knows the name of everything. I also want to know who the narrator is and why they didn't know the name. I feel like I am included in the aside that Marion knows the name of everything. I want to read on.

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Emily
2/28/2016 11:43:52 pm

Thank you Carrie and Kirsti! What a great beginning about beginnings! How about from NOT A BOX by Antoinette Portis....
"Why are you sitting in a box?"

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Kristen Browning
2/29/2016 12:44:55 am

Great post! I liked this opening line that I read tonight: "Henry loved books. But not like you and I love books, no. Not quite..." --Oliver Jeffers THE INCREDIBLE BOOK EATING BOY

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Keila Dawson link
2/29/2016 01:09:57 am

Totally agree with Andrea. Added to my favorite first lines is tge one from Lenny & Lucy by Phillip Stead. "Winding along a bumpy road, through the dark unfriendly woods, Peter said, "I think this is a terrible idea."

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Heather Pierce Stigall link
2/29/2016 07:26:54 am

So many to choose from, but here is one of my recent favorites: LENNY & LUCY by Philip & Erin Stead -- "Winding along a bumpy road, through the dark unfriendly woods, Peter said, 'I think this is a terrible idea.'" It introduces the setting, mood and MC and I want to know more about Peter immediately!

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Joan Swanson
2/29/2016 08:28:50 am

"If a hungry little traveler shows up at your house, you might want to give him a cookie" is the beginning of one of my all time favorite books!

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Mary Warth
2/29/2016 09:16:12 am

What great openings! I have to say, mine is the opening for The Monstore- it grabbed me right away!

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Janet Smart link
2/29/2016 09:40:27 am

Great post. You always hear to have a great beginning for your story. This post made me really think about it. I decided to go visit my manuscripts and concentrate on the beginnings. I have already made a change to one of my PBs. And, it did make it better. Now - onto my other manuscripts!

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Traci Bold link
2/29/2016 11:21:41 am

I have many but his is one of my favorites from ALEXANDER AND THE TERRIBLE, HORRIBLE, NO GOOD, VERY BAD DAY :
'I went to sleep with gum in my mouth and now there's gum in my hair and when I got out of bed this morning, I tripped on the skateboard and by mistake I dropped my sweater in the sink while the water was running and I could tell it was going to be a terrible, horrible, no good, very bad day.'

Instantly, I was hooked when I read this many years ago, because I had had mornings like that so i was instantly engrossed in the story. Of course, the title had me hooked to open the book in the first case.

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Lauren Kerstein link
2/29/2016 11:35:52 am

This post was CHOCK FULL of SUCH helpful information!

"Leonardo was a terrible monster..." Mo Willems.
I want to know why he was a terrible monster. Monsters-- who doesn't want to read about monsters? Particularly, terrible ones.

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Kirsti Call
3/4/2016 06:17:47 am

I immediately thought of this line for our post, but we were trying to keep the first lines current! Thanks for sharing. Love this!

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Lynn Davidson link
2/29/2016 02:56:09 pm

This is such a great beginning to ReFoReMo! I know I'm going to learn a lot.

There are many books I like, two are older ones that I'll mention - the first is the sweetest story.

Emma Bean by Jean Van Leeuwen: Once there was a rabbit and she had a girl. The girl's name was Molly. The rabbit was Emma Bean.

PuddleDuck by Nancy Hundal: That one spring, Bianca knew that Puddleduck would come back. He had been gone a long time - since the summer before. But when she saw from her window the gray sheets of rain slicing through the clouds, she knew her Puddleduck was coming too.

A newer book is I Am Otter by Sam Garton (which I see is listed on day 8): Hi! I am Otter. No one really knows where I came from. Otter Keeper says that he found me in a box on his doorstep one day.


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Tanya Konerman link
2/29/2016 03:56:21 pm

"There were five of them.
And they were waiting...
- Waiting by Kevin Henkes

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Kathy Mazurowski
2/29/2016 05:18:38 pm

Wonderful! I have too many favorites to list. Now, I have to go back to look at my first lines again!

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Jennifer Cole Judd link
2/29/2016 07:30:25 pm

I am late to this party, but love all of the awesome beginnings! Here is a recent one that I adore, because it's so lyrical to me (I'm gong to add the first two sentences, since the book has a first page spread, instead of first page)--

"CJ pushed through the church doors, skipped down the steps. The outside air smelled like freedom, but it also smelled like rain, which freckled CJ's shirt and dripped down his nose."--LAST STOP ON MARKET STREET by Matt de la Pena

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Lisa Rogers
3/2/2016 04:51:31 pm

Lots of lyrical language in this book--I love that beginning! Thanks for posting it.

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Lydia Lukidis link
2/29/2016 08:39:32 pm

This is a great reminder. I'm usually busy trying to set up my story ont he first page, that I sometimes don't focus on DRAWING the reader in!

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Charlene Steadman
2/29/2016 09:37:27 pm

I also like
"Nadine was a truly remarkable cow. They was nothing she feared-so she claimed, anyhow."
from I Am a Cow, hear Me Moo!

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Jess Townes link
2/29/2016 09:59:21 pm

Such great choices. I LOVED the opening to One Word from Sofia, had to keep reading. I really love the opening two lines (I know, I'm already cheating on day 1...or pre-day 1, even worse) from Mr. Tiger Goes Wild -

Everyone was perfectly fine with the way things were. Everyone but Mr. Tiger.

I immediately want to know how things are exactly, and what is Mr. Tiger not okay with?

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Pamela Courtney
3/1/2016 12:29:11 am

Boy oh boy, this post is getting us off to a great start. Love it! I guess I have to say that I love the opening lines to, The Giving Tree: "Once there was a tree and she loved a little boy.

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Sheila Lynch-Afryl
3/1/2016 06:08:00 am

Enemy Pie: "It should have been a perfect summer."

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Mary Boehmer
3/1/2016 08:28:09 am

Thank you for sharing with us! What a great way to start, I'm so excited. One of my favorite, favorites is by Oliver Jeffers. "Henry loved books. But not like you and I love books, no. Not quite.. I was hooked! Reading this to my library class you could tell how it had hooked the kids, they started to move closer, silently they waited as the story unfolded.

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Robin Currie link
3/1/2016 09:09:10 am

"The night Max made mischief of one kind and another..." from Sendak's Where the Wild Things Are.

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christie allred link
3/1/2016 12:51:02 pm

Making the first sentence stand out can be one of the biggest challenges of writing a PB. Thanks for the reminder to make it great. :)

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L. Michelle Quraishi link
3/1/2016 04:46:39 pm

"There are, in this world, people who are born collectors." -The Boy Who Loved Words, Roni Schotter & Gizelle Potter

Right away I identified with the as-yet-unidentified mc. Questions kept me reading: "Am I a born collector? What do I collect? Who will this story be about? What weird thing will s/he collect?"

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Kirsti Call
3/4/2016 06:15:30 am

What a wonderful start to a wonderful book!

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Lisa Williams
3/5/2016 11:43:24 am

I NEED this book! Thanks for posting it in the comments.

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Denise Benavides
3/1/2016 05:14:16 pm

"You're Here for a Reason"
You're here for a reason, you certainly are. The world would be different without you, by far.

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Laura Renauld
3/1/2016 06:51:30 pm

"Of course he's miserable," moaned Wesley's mother. "He sticks out."

"Like a nose," snapped his father.

Love this dialogue! From Weslandia by Paul Fleischman.

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Lauri Meyers link
3/1/2016 09:38:55 pm

Great beginning(s) Kirsti, and a great beginning to my reading list!

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Suzanne Poulter Harris
3/1/2016 10:59:06 pm

Even the comments are a lesson on great beginnings. Looking forward to a whole month of learning!

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Susie Sawyer link
3/1/2016 11:32:49 pm

Great choices for books with great beginnings!

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Shelley Marshall
3/2/2016 01:25:49 am

I absolutely loved reading these beginnings. Thank you for pointing how how the impulse to turn the page and begin the book can be informed so dramatically by those first few words.

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MD Knabb
3/2/2016 06:50:37 am

One of my favorites is " On the outside Bernadette was mostly MONSTERLY" from Tammi Sauer's MOSTLY MONSTERLY.

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Myrna Foster
3/2/2016 07:01:05 am

Thanks for this post! I stress more over my beginnings than I do all of the other parts of the story combined. Looking at great mentor texts helps!

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Carrie Pearson link
3/2/2016 07:40:29 am

I love the absurdity of Dev Petty/Mike Boldt's I Don't Want to Be a Frog. First line is from Frog: "I want to be a cat." The premise of the whole book is right there in six words!

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Brook Gideon link
3/2/2016 09:52:02 am

What an excellent start! The post reminds me to start strong! sometimes it's easy to get lost in setting up the story in your head. All the comments had great suggestions too!

My pick is Shaun Tan's "The Red Tree"

sometimes the day begins with nothing to look forward to

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Jilanne Hoffmann
3/2/2016 03:13:04 pm

I am sooo excited for ReFoReMo that I started early. ha! Love it! Pop the cork, here we go!

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Marlene Rohr
3/2/2016 07:35:49 pm

All of these posts are so helpful and lovely to read. The beginning line I like is from Swan: The city is big. Anna is small. The snow is everywhere and all around.

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Lisa Williams
3/2/2016 10:26:33 pm

I was finally able to pick up a huge stack of books from the library today and got a chance to read Bridget's Beret. I was so excited!!! Not because of the beginning, but because it has Bridget's take on a Van Gogh. I teach a Van Gogh/art unit each year to lower grades and am always on the lookout for new picture books I can use with that unit. Other paintings were also included AND it had back matter about art! SCORE!!

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Kirsti Call
3/4/2016 06:14:08 am

This is definitely one of my favorite PBs!

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Rebecca Trembula
3/3/2016 06:43:35 am

Out of the 22 picture books in my active-reading stack, my favorite first lines are: "Laszlo was afraid of the dark" (The Dark, text by Lemony Snicket) because it instantly lets you know he's going to end up in the dark somehow and "Where...where...is your honey pot, bear?" (Where is your Honey Pot, Bear? by Garry Fleming) because the meandering text sets up the gentle rhythm of the rest of the book.

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Jane Buttery link
3/3/2016 09:38:28 am

I loved your blog and I do know how first lines hook readers. Ellen Levine caught me with the words Henry did not know his birthday and then at the end March29th1849 henry freedom birthday brought it altogether. The illustrations are wonerfuland one can feel his pain losing family. I have also enjoyed other opeing lines and i love this REFOREMO and tell every friend I know about it including our local librarian.Thank you for starting this site. Hope you got my donation.

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Kirsti Call
3/4/2016 06:13:23 am

Thank you Jane! You are much appreciated. So glad you're loving ReFoReMo!!!

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Lauren Barbieri
3/4/2016 11:08:25 am

"When Hana Hashimoto announced that she had signed up for the talent show and that she would be playing the violin, her brothers nearly fell out of a tree." - Hana Hashimoto, Sixth Violin (Chieri Uegaki & Qin Leng)

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Caroline Webster link
3/5/2016 12:44:50 am

I'm currently living in Korea, and most of my beloved picture books that I own are in storage in the U.S. I'm sharing a beginning from Astrid Lindgren, as a few of her books are here with us :-). I find her books timeless in the same way the Anne of Green Gables books are. I was introduced to Astrid Lindgren by my Austrian host mother. Originally written in Swedish, I first read the books in German, and now share the English translations with my sons :-). Her books aren't picture books, more early novels/chapter books. Here is her opening from Karlson on the Roof: "In a perfectly ordinary street in a perfectly ordinary house in Stockholm lives a perfectly ordinary family called Stevenson. It consists of a perfectly ordinary father and a perfectly ordinary mother and three perfectly ordinary children, Seb, Sally, and Smidge. 'I'm not an ordinary Smidge at all,' says Smidge. But he's lying."
And, her opening to Emil's Clever Pig goes: "There was never a boy in the whole of Lonneberga and in the whole of Smaland and in the whole of Sweden and--who knows--perhaps in the whole world who got into more mischief than Emill." I'll mention one other title I have with us--a book introduced to our family by my younger son's kindergarten teacher. This was one of her beloved childhood books: Jenny and the Cat Club by Ester Averhill. Here is the opening: "In Captain Tinker's garden, once upon a time, there was a Cat Club. All the cats and kittens in the neighborhood were members. All but Jenny Linsky." Thank you for sharing some of your favorite beginnings. There is so much rich content here in the land of ReFoReMo!

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Sue Ganz-Schmitt link
3/6/2016 12:41:50 am

Okay - you have me inspired to pull out all my manuscripts in progress and take my first lines up a notch!

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Nancy Rimar
3/6/2016 10:31:49 am

Wilfred owned a moose. THIS MOOSE BELONGS TO ME
I want to know why and how he owns a moose.

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Jena Benton link
3/6/2016 04:53:49 pm

What a wonderful assortment of "hooks." I love this highlight as something I can look forward to researching. =)

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Linda Thomas
3/6/2016 07:16:56 pm

An oldie but goodie, by Mercer Mayer:
"There used to be an alligator under my bed."
Thank you for a great beginning for ReFoReMo!

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Amanda Sincavage
3/7/2016 02:56:58 am

Most of these books are new to me and still waiting on the majority from the library, but I've become quite fond of Julie Fogliano's "First you have brown, all around you have brown" - my 14-month old is trying to say brown!

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Anita Jones link
3/19/2016 04:04:45 pm

I thought I had commented on this...apparently not, but I wanted to say how wonderful this experience has been so far. I've learned so much and I'm so excited to apply all these new elements in my writing and illustrating. Thanks for all your efforts in creating this adventure for so many of us!!

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Suzy Leopold
3/20/2016 10:37:25 pm

It is so important for the first line to hook the reader right away. Something has to happen. The character on the first page cannot be the same character that the reader leaves on the last page.

"Wemberly worried about everything."

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Lenne' Musarra
3/28/2016 02:18:18 pm

The Story of Ping by Marjorie Flack and Kurt Wiese
"Once upon a time there was a beautiful young duck named Ping. Ping lived with his mother and his father and two sisters and three brothers and eleven aunts and seven uncles and forty-two cousins.
Their home was a boat with two wise eyes on the Yangtze River.
Each morning as the sun rose from the east, Ping and his mother and his father and two sisters and three brothers and eleven aunts
and seven uncles and forty-two cousins all marched one by one,
down a little bridge to the shore of the Yangtze River."
I want to learn more about this young duck who lives amongst all these relatives and yet has the freedom each day to walk over the bridge and explore the wide world of the Yangtzy River.

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